Grammar help.

[scarygirl]

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[conversationpc]

Is this sentence grammatical?



Paired with an overnight stay in one of their custom rooms, complete with amenities like comfy beds, Egyptian cotton sheets, fluffy down pillows, and in-room spa services, you’ll feel so relaxed by the end of your stay that the next time you see a Kardashian on TV, you might just let them live to see another day.


Keep holding in all that stress like that and you might gun down the first Kardashian you see on TV. Today’s deal from Miami Standard Spa will melt away blues brought on by TV viewing gone astray: Pay $60 for a 90–minute massage (regularly $150) that anything but standard: The Standard Massage. Their holistically focused practitioners combine multiple bodywork techniques, hydrotherapy, essential oils, and awareness to create a highly individualized therapeutic massage experience. Paired with an overnight stay in one of their custom rooms, complete with amenities like comfy beds, Egyptian cotton sheets, fluffy down pillows, and in-room spa services, you’ll feel so relaxed by the end of your stay that the next time you see a Kardashian on TV, you might just let them live to see another day.

The only change I'd make would be to replace the first comma with "and".

[scarygirl]

Is this sentence grammatical?



The only change I'd make would be to replace the first comma with "and".